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The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in the industrial sector, in four European countries in 2002

The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in the industrial sector, in four European countries in 2002
The given bar chart illustrates the number of working
hours
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 per
week
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 in four European
countries
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, in the industrial sector in 2002. It’s clear from the graph that workers in four land work an average of more than 30
hours
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 per date. The most common working
hours
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 across
countries
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 range from thirty-four to forty
hours
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 per
week
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 but France is the country with the highest character of
nation
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 working an average from thirty-one to thirty-three
hours
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 a day It’s interesting to note that France and Sweden are the
countries
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 with the highest number of
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society
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societies
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 working an average of 31 to 40
hours
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 per
week
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. The proportion of French
people
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 who work 31-33
hours
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 per
week
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 is about 10% more than Swedish
people
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. But the proportion of Swedish
people
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 working 34-40
hours
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 a
week
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 is nearly double that of French
people
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. It can be seen, that the percentage of
people
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 working less than 30
hours
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 in these two
countries
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 is low, both below 20 per cent and the percentage of
society
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 working more than 40
hours
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 is small, ranging from 10 to more than 20 per cent
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,
Denmark
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 and the
UK
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 are the two land with the lowest number of
people
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 working an average of 31-33
hours
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 per
week
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, but the proportion of
Denmark
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people
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 is nearly double the
UK
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's. The percentage of workers in
Denmark
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 for 34-40
hours
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 is 70%,
while
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 in the
UK
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 it is only about 50%.
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, we can see that the rate of British
people
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 working after 40
hours
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 is 5-10% more than Danes. The statistic
of
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society
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 working less than 30
hours
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 in
Denmark
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 is almost the same about 10%. In short, the
UK
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 is the country with the highest capacity of
society
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 working more than 50
hours
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, countries, society, people, denmark, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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