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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The aforementioned picture represents the comparison between before and after
development
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the development
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 of various facilities related to tourism. In the big picture, it is conspicuous that there are new
comercial
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commercial
 districts and additional roads. Focusing on the western island, in the previous time, there were only three trees planted in the corner, before introducing some additional features.
In addition
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, there is a reception surrounded by
footpath
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a footpath
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 to accommodate pedestrians walking in the corner of the island.
Moreover
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,
accomodation
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accommodation
 for tourists is added to the west of
this
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 building.
Next,
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a pier is constructed to enable travellers
participating
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to participate
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the
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in the
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 sailing journey and the footpath is built for visitors who want to swim at the sea. Moving to the east, there is a significant
diference
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difference
 from the previous side because only limited change is shown. Trees from past
time
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 had been removed from their location.
However
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, another
accomodation
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accommodation
 was introduced in the eastern of
this
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 island, consisting
9
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of 9
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rooms.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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