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In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvanatages of living in a small community?

In the previous time the community
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 to be more
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 and close owing to the small
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circle
 they lived in,
however
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, nowadays the buildings are bigger and
people
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 bearly communicate together.
Firstly
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, back in
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were
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the technology wasn't a big thing and the majority of
people
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had
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greet
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 each other face to face, the outcome of that was meetings
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 be on the daily
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basis
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 and knowing other villagers
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 be extand
also
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 will be clearly larger,
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 the
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beneficial
 were the person can know
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whether
 if his nighuber needed help or not
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besides
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 they share the same happy news
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easily
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these days the lack of communication is a struggle we face
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a
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daily
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basis
biases
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furthermore
,
this
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 generation
have
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 the idea
of
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 having a small
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circle
 of
people
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is
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 more
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convenient
 and enough. In my
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perspective
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perspective
 knowing a large group of
people
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 could be
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exhausted
excused
due to
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 dealing with their problems it is not always the case
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from
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form
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from
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 time to time having
a
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many
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people
peole
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people you
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you
 know can be heart
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whelming
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to sum up
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, both sides have
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disadvantages and
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advantages
advdantages
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advantages
 it depends on the generation that we live in we maybe lack the communication,
on the contrary
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,
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 sure we
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develop
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skills
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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. This will help readers understand your view.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphs to separate your ideas. Each paragraph should have a main point to make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar, as mistakes can make it hard for readers to understand your points.
task achievement
You provide some interesting points about benefits and problems of small communities.
task achievement
You attempt to give examples, which is good for supporting your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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