Many students choose to study at colleges and universities that are far away from the places where they grew up. Do the benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks?

A lot of
students
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seclect
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select
to complete their higher
education
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abroad or
faraway
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far away
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from their
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hometown
hometowns
and
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families
.
Although
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this
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choice will
cost
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them extra
money
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, I believe it will improve their
future
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by gaining
better
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education
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. Many
students
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financialy
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financially
depend on their
families
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. When they choose to complete their studies
faraway
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far away
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,
this
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will
cost
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them extra
money
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for their
education
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fees, housing, food and healthcare. Many
students
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need to work or ask their
families
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to support them.
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, when a student
work
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night
shefts
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shifts
shafts
to provide
money
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for the basic needs
cost
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, he or she will
has
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less time to
study
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, which
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negatively
affect
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their
education
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.
Moreover
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, many
families
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unable
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are unable
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to support their
childern
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children
. I believe that when
students
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decide to
study
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abrod
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abroad
, they need to manage their budgets or ask their
families
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to support them.
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, studying abroad
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a huge impact on
students
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's
education
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and
future
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. Many
students
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are from small cities or rural areas that have a lack of good
education
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. Many
students
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travil
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travel
to
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countries for the sake of enhancing their
future
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, and find better educational
instituation
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institution
institutions
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, many Saudi
students
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move to
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the United
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State
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to
study
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majors that
are
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not
exsist
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exist
exists
in Saudi Arabia, which
lead
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leads
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to
improve
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their
future
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. I think the
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benefits
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of getting
better
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job in
future
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is
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outweight
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outweigh
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the drawbacks of costing extra
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. In conclusion,
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although
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many
students
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choose to
study
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far from where they
grow
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grew
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up, which will
cost
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them more
money
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. I believe getting better learning and improving
students
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's
future
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is more important than thinking about the
cost
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly explain both sides. You discussed drawbacks and benefits, but the structure could be clearer. Use paragraphs to separate different ideas more clearly.
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Be careful with grammar and spelling. There are some mistakes in your writing that can confuse the reader, such as 'seclect' instead of 'select' and 'hometwon' instead of 'hometown'.
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Use more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mentioning more countries or fields of study can make your argument stronger.
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Your essay has a clear opinion, which is good. You believe that the benefits of studying far away outweigh the drawbacks, which gives your essay focus.
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You address important points regarding financial issues and educational quality, showing that you understand the topic well.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural sensitivity
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • specialized programs
  • networking
  • career opportunities
  • homesickness
  • cultural shock
  • financial strain
  • accommodation
  • cost of living
  • family relationships
  • emotional challenges
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