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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at the school. To what extend do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

People in the field of education contemplate that cross-cultural exchanges at the secondary
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 level will be beneficial for pupils.
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 there might be possible drawbacks in terms of the curriculum taught, I believe that implementation of these programs outweigh its challenges and can be transformative for the lives of teenagers
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 their huge impact on the improvement of a foreign language and broadening the worldview.
One
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 major advantage of international exchange is the opportunity to learn or improve
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foreign language skills. In order to be a proficient speaker, it is necessary to be exposed to the language on
daily
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 basis.
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 to
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, enhanced linguistic skills enable
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 read and comprehend
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informational materials, which leads to
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 the
world view
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worldview
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.
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 of the main reasons
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this
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 is a daily compulsory engagement with the local people.
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, two people start learning French at the same time for
one
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 year. The first
one
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 chooses to study merely at
school
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,
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 the second spends three months in France.
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 of their
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-year preparation period, the latter will be more fluent in French and gain more information about the culture. On the downside, students might face difficulties because of the curriculum differences between the home and host schools.
This
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 often reflects itself in the form of credits that are obtained. If
this
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 process is not managed properly by
school
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 counselors, it may cause a delay
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student's
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graduate
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 date and jeopardize
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future plans.
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, a German student takes
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 class at her high
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 the second year of her studies,
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 she can study it in the
last
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 year in the United States.
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, it creates discrepancies in terms of fulfilling the graduation requirements. In conclusion, an international exchange visit may raise a problem because of the syllabi.
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, it is undeniable that these programs are beneficial for juveniles
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 because the process creates opportunities for personal growth. In my opinion, it is
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 transformative experience, which helps a teenager to develop
self-confidece
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self-confidence
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Make sure your introduction clearly states your main argument. Also, add a stronger concluding statement.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. This will help your essay flow better.
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Expand on your points with more examples to support your arguments more clearly.
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You have a clear argument about the benefits of exchange programs.
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Your examples are relevant and illustrate your points well.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educationalists
  • international exchange visits
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • school
  • exposes
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • enhances
  • language skills
  • promotes
  • independence
  • self-confidence
  • builds
  • lifelong friendships
  • provides
  • unique learning experiences
  • expensive
  • homesickness
  • emotional distress
  • careful planning
  • logistical arrangements
  • disrupt
  • academic progress
  • safety
  • security risks
  • cultural appropriation
  • misunderstandings
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