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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the mean carbon dioxide
emissions
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 for every individual in four countries, the UK, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
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, it can be seen clearly that people in the United Kingdom were responsible for the highest amount of CO2 emission,
whereas
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 the Portuguese contributed the least. In 1967, each of the Britains contributed an average of approximately 11 metric
tonnes
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 of carbon
emissions
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 and saw a gradual decline over a period of 40
years
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,
while
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 the residences of Swedish were responsible for slightly lesser
emissions
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 compared to the people in the UK, starting at the same level where the Britains finished in 2007, 9 metric
tonnes
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.
Then
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, the average CO2
emissions
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 for every individual in Sweden steadily increased within the next 10
years
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, reaching a peak of just over 10 metric
tonnes
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 before drastically dropping for the next 30
years
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 of timescale, marking just above 5 metric
tonnes
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. In sharp contrast to
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,
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 Italy and Portugal started at a much lower average CO2
emissions
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 per person compared to the other two countries in 1967, these countries, interestingly, only saw a steady increase in
emissions
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 throughout the 40-year period of time. Italy started at around 4 metric
tonnes
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 and gradually rose to just under 8 metric
tonnes
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 in 1997, and levelling off until 2007. Meanwhile, the people from Portugal being the least CO2 contributors were only responsible for an average of 1 metric ton.
Following
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this
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, the number consistently went up for the next 30
years
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, reaching 5 metric
tonnes
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 in 1997, and remained fairly constant until 2007.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, co, tonnes, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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