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In some countries, governments have tried to reduce the traffic. For instance, they imposed a congestion tax during the rush hours. Do you think this development is positive or negative?

There is no gainsaying the fact that in a few nations,
congestion
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tax
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 has been imposed/levied/slapped by many authorities/regimes to mitigate the problem of traffic bottlenecks in the rush
hours
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. Imposing
tax
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 in
the
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peak
hours
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 has both pros and cons. But, from my perspective, it is
positive
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 development
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 its a number of merits. To commence with, one of the most plausible reasons
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 slapping
congestion
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tax
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 during peak
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fruitful
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 is that these days; most
of
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apply
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people
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their
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private vehicles which run by burning fossil
fuel
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.
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this
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, these cars emit obnoxious gasses which lead to pollution.
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,
people
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 fall prey/victim to a number of health hassles.
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, when
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tax
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 is levied
then
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people
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 prefer public transport over private.
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, it does not only eradicate the problem of traffic
jam
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, but it
also
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 mitigates the problem of pollution.
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,
congestion
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tax
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 comes in immensely handy
of
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 many countries.
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, another benefit of
this
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 situation which cannot be overlooked is that governments can improve public transportation infrastructure.
For instance
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, when
tax
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 is levied on private
vehicle
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vehicles
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 in the rush
hours
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, governments collect a big chunk of money from these vehicles.
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this
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, governments can use
this
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 money to ameliorate the pitiable condition of public transportation.
That is
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 why, if public transport is very convenient and frequent, why will
people
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 use private
vehicle
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vehicles
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?
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,
congestion
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tax
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 is
win-win
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 situation for both government and
people
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. In Compendium, given the aforementioned information, it is quite evident that there are multifarious merits of imposing
congestion
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tax
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 in the peak
hours
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. That’s why, it is a positive development.

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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that relates directly to your argument. Your points should be more clearly connected to your main stance.
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Use more specific examples to support your points, which will make your argument stronger and clearer for the reader.
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Your essay has a clear opinion and the introduction gives a good overview of what you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraphs are logically organized, which helps the reader follow your ideas easily.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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