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Band 5

Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding a
bag
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 that I
have
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apply
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forgot
in
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on
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 the flight (546) from Toronto to London, yesterday by mistake. Until I got to the hotel, I did not realize that my
bag
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 was left on the plane.
Usually
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Usually,
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 I only carry my laptop
bag
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 on flights,
however
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,
this
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 time I was
carring
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carrying
caring
 my gaming console
aswell
Correct your spelling
as well
.
Also
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, it was a long
six hour
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six-hour
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 journey. I
fall
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fell
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 asleep till the time plane landed
to
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in
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 London.
Thereafter
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, all the flight attendees
stareted
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started
 leaving the plane in
rush
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a rush
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,
so
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and so
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 did
i
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I
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, and
i
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I
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 only took my laptop
bag
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.
Furthermore
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, the
bag
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 which I want you to look for is
little
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small
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 in size but weights twelve pounds, it is in black colour, it
appear
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appears
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 as a box with side straps, it has Xbox a gaming console inside which
also
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 looks similar to
small
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a small
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 white box, it
also
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 contains red wireless remote controller and couple of cords.
Therefore
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, I would like to request your staff to find my
bag
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 in
same
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the same
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 condition as it was before and send it to my hotel where I am staying till next week, as
i
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I
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 have to attend
business
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a business
the business
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 seminar on coming
monday
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Monday
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,
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apply
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 and have nothing to do till
weekend
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the weekend
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, that was the reason why
i
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I
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 bought my game with me. Thanking you and hoping for your kind cooperation. yours Faithfully, Jack

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task achievement
Make sure to proofread your letter to correct spelling mistakes, such as 'carring' to 'carrying' and 'appear' to 'appears'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to group related ideas together in paragraphs. For instance, describe your experience first, then the bag, and finally your request.
coherence and cohesion
Use a more formal closing, such as 'Yours sincerely,' instead of 'yours Faithfully'.
task achievement
You clearly explained what happened and provided details about your bag, which is good.
task achievement
Your message is polite and your request is clear, showing good tone.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unfortunate incident
  • Flight details
  • Distraction
  • Valuable possessions
  • Sentimental value
  • Lost and found procedure
  • Safe return
  • Compensation
  • Assistance
  • Gratitude
  • Follow-up
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