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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/she would like your advice about finding a place to live. Writr an letter to your friend. In your letter Describe where you would lived when you were a student at the university. Recommend the best what from him/her to look accommodation. Warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation.

Hello Jihan, First of all congratulations! I knew you'd get accepted.
The next step is
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 for you to find a dorm, usually at the university you applied
in
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foreigner
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 students into their dorms, but given the amount of students I heard they have new regulations, s definitely check with them. If
you're
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 situation does apply to the condition under which a student is
permitied
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permitted
 the chance to stay at an onsite dorm,
then
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 I suggest you definitely take that option
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 since it's closest to your classes. Once you get access make sure that they've located you near the building of your accommodation, apparently, they don'
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 distribute students based on the
convinience
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convenience
 of their location,
rather
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 on the dorm availability. Some dorms have
are
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joint rooms and others are for a single person. If you were assigned to a room
that is
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 double-jointed make sure you get an overview of your roommates —just in case. My other suggestion is that, if you don'
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 mind the distance and transportation, definitely consider an apartment, it's
cozy
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 and you'll have more freedom going in and out of it, plus, if you're thinking of hosting gathers and
such
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, it'll be
more loose
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 of
a
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space, you wouldn'
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 need a permit, unlike campus
resedence
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residence
. It might be extra helpful if you have family here, the pressure of studying sometimes can get you blue,
having
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 family around might cheer you up. If something does pop up I'll be sure to send it your way. I hope
this
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 was helpful if you have any other questions don'
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 be hesitant to ask. See you soon. Love Rana.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your letter into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea. This will help the reader follow your thoughts.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use proper greetings and closings that fit a letter. For example, you could start with 'Dear Jihan' and end with 'Best wishes'.
task response
Add more details about the dorms you lived in to give your friend a clearer picture of what to expect.
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Watch out for grammar mistakes and typos, like 'what' instead of 'way' and 'resedence' instead of 'residence'.
task achievement
It's great that you congratulated your friend at the start of the letter. This shows your support!
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You included many useful suggestions about living options, which is very helpful for your friend.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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