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Writing Samples
Band 3

Essay:As the number of private cars has increased, so too has the level of pollution in many cities.What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
increasing
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the increasing
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 number of private
cars
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. Almost
everyday
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 a significant number of
people
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try
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try to
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 buy their new own car.why
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do the
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the
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they
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 do that ?First things first ,
this
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 is so vital for
them
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those
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 who
has
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have
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 a big family
also
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 if we don’t consider only families, we know that it could
be need
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be needed
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 for
people
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 who
lives
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live
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 in big cities like London or Paris. And of
course
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people
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 prefer
more
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apply
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an easy life , so
car
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the car
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 plays
enough
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a
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 role in no harder life. So as
it
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it is
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 possible we have to stop have own
cars
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.
Due to
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 the buying and using a lot of
cars
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,
smogs
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smog
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level
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levels
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 have increased in many cities.To tackle
this
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 problem
people
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 should do these things.First is
improve
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to improve
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 public
transports
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transport
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.To reduce
own
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our own
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cars
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 and improve public
transports
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transport
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, we have to do it more
easy
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easily
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 and
efficient
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efficiently
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 for
people
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.
Example
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 build new ways for buses,
trams
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and trams
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 to quickly arrive.
Moreover
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 do apps with an easy
car sharing
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car-sharing
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 service , I mean you can
take to
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apply
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rent bicycles or electro scooters for a
few
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little
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 time.And
this
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is
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apply
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may be the easiest and so the best way to taxes. Governments should increase taxes for buying and
own
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owning
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cars
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 to stop and control the purchasing and demand for personal vehicles If countries use these main aspects to stop purchasing
cars
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, perhaps after enough years we will have
an
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apply
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amazing air and
climate
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the climate
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 will be better than now.And every country could have
best
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the best
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 public transport

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state the problem and outline your main points. Consider adding more background information about the issue.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly. Use paragraphs to separate different ideas and make it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to help the reader see the flow of your ideas. This will improve coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your sentences are clear and check for grammatical mistakes, such as 'why the do that?'. This will help your ideas to come across better.
task achievement
You have addressed the topic and provided some solutions to the problem, which is a good start.
task achievement
Your ideas about improving public transport and car-sharing services are relevant and practical.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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