It is wrong to become wealthy through unethical business practices, even if it helps society. Do you agree?

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approach is acceptable even if it is contributing to
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society
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is still a debatable topic. The writer of
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essay agrees that getting money through that approach is wrong because of fairness and
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the negative
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on other competitors despite being temporary. By using unethical practices,
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are damaging the fairness of
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.
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,
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will cause
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society
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disturbance and instability because of hatred and envy from others,
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, people will wish for the
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downfall.
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, one works hard just to earn the minimum wage
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others use half of the
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and earn double.
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,
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businesses
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can get unfair advantages leading to significant credibility
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causing trouble for other
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. As aforementioned,
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leads to
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on the competitive market. Needless to say, some
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are ready to underpay workers to get cheaper
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. Concurrently,
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that have the same products will be more costly because of their expenses
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for affording wages for workers.
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, ethical
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will prioritize cost-cutting over consumers'
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and wants by using cheap materials resulting in lower-quality products and services.
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unethical practices are only for the start where the majority of investors struggle the most. It can be understood that by using illegal ways to keep the business alive, once being financially stable, ethical approaches will
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. To be more specific,
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,
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can reinvest in cleaner technology, better wages for workers and even charitable initiatives, helping the
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and
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up employment
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opportunities
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.
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should encourage new investors to open
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without worrying about the minimum budget to survive the first stage.
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, it can be seen that temporary unethical practices
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less
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to fairness and
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impact
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the competition.
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, the writer of
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can not be legalized.

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You have a clear opinion on the topic and have made good points about fairness and competition.

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