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Band 4

In many countries today, parents are able to send their children to single-sex schools or co-education schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree.

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, my parents had to put me in a same sex school ,
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 attended a co-education school.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas better.
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Support your points with more examples or details.
strength
You have personal experience in both types of schools, which is a valuable perspective.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Single-sex education/schools
  • Co-educational schools
  • Social interaction
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Gender stereotypes
  • Gender-diverse perspectives
  • Collaboration and competition
  • Empathy
  • Globalized world
  • Adaptation
  • Real-world situations
  • Professional settings
  • Reduced stereotypes
  • Personal and professional development
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