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The bar chart shows the percentage of households with cars in a European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of households with cars in a European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the proportion of people who own
cars
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 in European nations from 1971 to 2001. In general, in the first ten years, the percentage of families who had no
car
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 was the highest. Having tow
cars
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 was not popular at that time. In 1991, the number of people who own one
car
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 was the highest and reached a peak.
Whereas
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 the number of folks with no
car
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 was decreased in the
last
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 period. In 1971, the proportion of families who
does
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do
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 not use
cars
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 stood at around 50 per cent.
Then
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 the number filling down to almost 30% in 1991. The figure remained unchanged in 2001. There
was
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were
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 only approximately 35
percent
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per cent
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 of
one
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one-car
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car
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 households
in in
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at
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 the beginning of the period. After that, there
a
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was a
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sudden
increasing
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increase
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 in 1991, and reached a peak at 46%.
While
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 people with 2
cars
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 and more
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 between 1971 and 1991.
Then
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 rose significantly from 20% in 1991 to more than 30 per cent in 2001.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • households
  • car ownership
  • no car
  • one car
  • two or more cars
  • trend
  • proportion
  • gradual increase
  • significant growth
  • decline
  • substantial
  • rivals
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