Many government spend a lot of money on art. Some people think this investment in art is necessary, but others say the money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is an ongoing debate regarding whether the governments should allocate their expenditure heavily
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art sectors rather than healthcare and education or not. In
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with, the
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are significant for society
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because
we can enhance our creativity and cultivate
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curiosity
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existence
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that entertainment
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. Without the contents,
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as movies, plays,
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literature
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and beautiful pictures,
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of our culture would be lost.
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, in rural areas of Japan,
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governmental decisions, one specific county reallocated the budget for
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cultural development to the national pension of residents.
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decision is currently regarded as one of the prominent failures because it
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leads to
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higher suicide rate in that county, and it has been proved that the main cause of
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serious result is the lack of entertainment.
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, it is true that the
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are essential for the entire society and
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sectors need to support
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field by endorsing financially.
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, it is
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true that citizens must be healthy and rich in physical and intellectual aspects because if they have no capacity to understand those
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and have health issues, they cannot even enjoy those contents.
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, to understand a specific oil painting, we need to
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capture
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arts
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this
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picture belongs to and what the painter wants to express through that picture.
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, some cultural knowledge
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essential, and we can acquire them through education.
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, when we hope to explore those creative contents, we
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need to visit the facilities
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as
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and museums. But if we have serious health problems and cannot reach those places physically, there is no opportunity for people to enjoy them.
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, health and education are more basic aspects of our society so
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the governments
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need to support these areas
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of cultural richness. In conclusion,
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the
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existence
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arts
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plays an essential role in our daily lives, healthcare and educational services are more directly related to our basic needs.
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reason, I suggest that the governments must need to allocate abundant financial
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on
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these fundamental services and invest in art afterwards.
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, my position is opposite to the opinion that
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sector should allocate more budgets
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art.

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coherence
Make sure every point clearly connects to your main argument. Sometimes the ideas can feel a bit disconnected.
cohesion
Use more linking words to help your ideas flow better, such as 'firstly', 'however', 'for example'.
task achievement
Make your reasons more clear. Ensure each paragraph directly relates to the main topic and supports your opinion.
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You provide a good discussion of both sides of the argument, which is important for this type of essay.
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Your examples are relevant and help to illustrate your points, especially regarding the importance of arts.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural legacy
  • nation's history and identity
  • fosters creativity
  • economic benefits
  • tourism
  • art markets
  • quality of life
  • cultural understanding
  • productive population
  • personal and economic growth
  • fundamental for long-term development
  • well-being
  • immediate tangible benefits
  • abstract benefits
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