Many government spend a lot of money on art. Some people think this investment in art is necessary, but others say the money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is an ongoing debate regarding whether the governments should allocate their expenditure heavily

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art sectors rather than healthcare and education or not. In

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essay, I will discuss both viewpoints and explain why I consider that societal aspects, including medical and educational services, should be prioritized.

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with, the

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are significant for society

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because

we can enhance our creativity and cultivate

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curiosity

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existence

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. Without the contents,

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as movies, plays,

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literature

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and beautiful pictures,

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of our culture would be lost.

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, in rural areas of Japan,

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governmental decisions, one specific county reallocated the budget for

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cultural development to the national pension of residents.

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decision is currently regarded as one of the prominent failures because it

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leads to

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higher suicide rate in that county, and it has been proved that the main cause of

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serious result is the lack of entertainment.

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, it is true that the

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are essential for the entire society and

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sectors need to support

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field by endorsing financially.

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, it is

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true that citizens must be healthy and rich in physical and intellectual aspects because if they have no capacity to understand those

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and have health issues, they cannot even enjoy those contents.

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, to understand a specific oil painting, we need to

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arts

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this

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picture belongs to and what the painter wants to express through that picture.

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, some cultural knowledge

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essential, and we can acquire them through education.

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, when we hope to explore those creative contents, we

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need to visit the facilities

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as

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and museums. But if we have serious health problems and cannot reach those places physically, there is no opportunity for people to enjoy them.

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, health and education are more basic aspects of our society so

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the governments

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need to support these areas

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of cultural richness. In conclusion,

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the

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existence

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plays an essential role in our daily lives, healthcare and educational services are more directly related to our basic needs.

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reason, I suggest that the governments must need to allocate abundant financial

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these fundamental services and invest in art afterwards.

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, my position is opposite to the opinion that

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sector should allocate more budgets

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art.