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In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances. What are the causes of this phonomenon and what are the some of possible solution

Many athletes use substances as a way of reaching their dreams of winning after a lot of training,
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Nonetheless
 it's not the perfect solution to achieve your goals.
Atheltes
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Athletes
Athletics
 is one of the most important communities that
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 our support and a huge amount of attention. They encourage our youth to practice sports
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 improve
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society's health mentally and physically.But what if sports
worsens
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peopl's
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people's
 health
instead
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 of improving it,
Unfortantlly
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Unfortunately
 many athletes use forbidden substances to make their dreams come true.They don't only do it for themselves they do
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the
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pressure making their parents and families proud. Society should stop asking these young people to succeed no matter what, Even if
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 cause them to lose their mental health by destroying it with
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excessive
decisive
 drug usage.

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You have identified a relevant issue in sports and the pressure athletes face, which is a good start.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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