Some peple think that cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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that living in urban
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is more
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than rural
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. Some people love living in
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more. personally,
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would like
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in cities. I will analyze my point of view. living in
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. living in the urban we can approach the convenience of
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education. about the famous
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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introduction and conclusion in your essay. This will help the reader understand your main points better.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your points. Instead of saying education is better in cities, mention specific cities or universities that are well-known.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs, each discussing a single point. This improves the flow of your essay.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion about your preference for city living, which is good.
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You started to discuss the advantages of living in the countryside, which shows you are considering both views.

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