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Band 2.5

Computers today can quickly and accurately translate languages; therefore, it is a waste to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
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necessary
 for everyone these days.
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,it can
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people
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 to translate accurately without any mistakes.To be honest,
people
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 should learn
languages
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,
also
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 they have to
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 on themselves,because if they
usually
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obssesed
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obsessed
 with
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computer
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the computer
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 just to do their duties
instead
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 of learning,that can lead to different issues like
less
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fewer language
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languages
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 skills,whatever I see they have to use it for translation rarely not always.
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 I agree with
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computers
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 to translate
languages
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 if we
have
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 not enough time to learn them,because many
people
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 are usually busy,and they are trying to complete their
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 or studies,
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,we have to memorise at least one of the most common
languages
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 worldwide like English,French or Spanish,because that can
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 us with a lot of benefits,and helps us to read and write correctly. I disagree with using
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computer
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a computer
the computer
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 for translation in many conditions,Namely,
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computer
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the computer
a computer
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 can not give the exact meaning,especially when you try to translate an essay
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 different
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in
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 the same time. If you want to be an expert in
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 world,you have to be more active and resilient,to handle your skills and get the best
oppertunites
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opportunities
,
on the other hand
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,you should be
co-operative
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 with the environment around you to make the world
better
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a better
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 place for living.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. This helps the reader know which side you support.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs, each with one main point. This improves your logical structure.
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Use specific examples to support your points. For example, you could mention situations where learning a language is better than using a computer translation.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating similar ideas. Instead, focus on providing different arguments to support your view.
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You have shared your opinion about the necessity of learning languages, which is important for the task.
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You mention the importance of time and busy lives, which is a relevant point.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automatic translation
  • language acquisition
  • bilingual/multilingual
  • cultural immersion
  • contextual understanding
  • nuance
  • language proficiency
  • intercultural communication
  • linguistic skills
  • translation software
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