Some people think a crime should have a fixed punishment, like lefe for mirder, whereas other tink you should takethe circumstances of the crime into account. what is your view point.

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days, whenever you turn on your phone, television, or flick the newspaper you will see the victims of
crime
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. Some people believe we should consider the
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circumstances
of the
crime
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into account. I strongly agree with
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of view, in
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essay and
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will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
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, there are prisoners who
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committed the
crime
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as
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self-defence
. Take a shoplifter
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, he attempted the
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becouse af
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because of
his
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hangar
and his in cells with inmates like,
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murder
,rapist and so on. Another main
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reason
, why
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strongly disagree with the statement is a large number of people are actually
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to
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the
society and the
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they have done
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because
of some
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situations
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.
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, in India, the lady has killed a rapist for her survival.
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low
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enforcement
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sentenced
her for 3 years
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improvement
.
On the other hand
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, there is an argument that
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predators
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should
always have
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a fixed
affixed
punishment,so once they enter
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jail and learn how they can become
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responsible
person. In conclusion, police
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and
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and
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law
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enforcement should consider the situation before
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the
they
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they
punish
criminal
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criminals
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and
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apply
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implement
impliment
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implement
the law and
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sentence
sentece
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accordingly
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task achievement
Improve your introduction by clearly stating your opinion and summarizing your main points. Make sure to correct spelling mistakes like 'curcumstances' and 'pint.'
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your paragraphs are clear. Each paragraph should discuss one main idea and follow a logical order. Use linking words like 'firstly,' 'secondly,' and 'in conclusion.'
coherence and cohesion
Use correct spelling and grammar, as errors can make your points hard to understand. For example, 'selfdefenss' should be 'self-defense,' and 'muders' should be 'murderers.'
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic, and you attempt to support it with examples, which is good.
task achievement
You included a real-life example from India, which adds depth to your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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