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Band 5

The given plans represent a house's interiors and its proposed plan.

The given plans represent a
house
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's interiors and its proposed plan. A brief overview is that the basic structure of the
house
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 will not be changed,
while
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 inside the
house
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, a storage
room
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 and a wall are earmarked to be demolished in order to clear up space for the living
room
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. Regarding the kitchen, the door from outside leading to the kitchen will be intact
while
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 the door
that is
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 connected with the
stairs
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 is planned to be moved to the south for a double-door entrance.
Additionally
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, the
room
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 will be well equipped with kitchen furniture, surrounding the left
house
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 walls. Turning to the living
room
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 where the
stairs
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 will be rebuilt for better access. Concurrently, the wall between the current hall and living
room
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 is going to be torn down with its door.
Similarly
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, the storage under the
stairs
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 will be moved or removed so as to make way for the new
stairs
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 design.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to group your ideas more clearly. For example, talk about the kitchen, then living room in separate paragraphs.
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Make sure to give a short conclusion that summarizes your main points.
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Add more details on the changes, such as what materials will be used or how the spaces will work together.
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You have a clear understanding of the plans and what changes are made.
coherence and cohesion
Your use of linking words is good, helping to connect ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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