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Band 5.5

The air-conditioner in your flat broke three weeks aago anf it is the middle of summer. You asked the landlord to repair it and he promised to send someone but no-one has contacted you yet. Write a letter to the landlord complaining about the situation. In your letter: explain the problem, remind the landlord about his promise, say what you want him to do.

Dear Mr. Huges, I am writing to ask you to renew my request for a prompt intervention to repair the air conditioning system in my apartment, which is not working anymore. It is summertime and, as you know, it is really hot even during
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. I work remotely and it is impossible to stay here without the air conditioning working.
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, the exposure of the house, completely
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 the South, makes the situation even worse. As you can easily understand, I cannot sleep,
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 work. When I called you a week ago, you promised that a technician would
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 me urgently to solve the problem, but
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 no one called me to make an appointment. I insist on the
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urgency
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 situation is becoming really unbearable. Thank you in advance for your support. Looking forward to
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 news from you. Best Regards, Nadia Simionato

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have clear and separate paragraphs for each idea. This helps in understanding your message better.
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Try to include specific details or dates to make your complaint stronger. Mentioning when you first reported the issue could be helpful.
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Use more polite language such as 'I would appreciate it if you could...' instead of 'I insist on the urgency'. This keeps a friendly tone.
greeting and closing
You started the letter politely and addressed the landlord by name. This shows respect.
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You clearly explained why the air conditioning is important for your work and rest, making your case strong.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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