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Some people consider thinking about and planning for the future to be a waste of time. They argue that people should simply live in the moment. Do you agree or disagree? Use at least one personal example in your response

Some argue that
people
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 should focus on being present rather than wasting time planning ahead and worrying about the
future
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.
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 I disagree with the idea that planning is a waste of time, I do believe that both living in the moment and preparing for the
future
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 are equally important and
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 significant
role
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 in
people
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's lives. On the one hand, many
individuals
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 prefer to focus on the present. Being in the moment allows them to take things one step at a time and deal with challenges as they arise.
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, medical students who
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 to work in the UK after graduation usually begin by attempting an English language exam before pursuing other requirements. By doing so, they remain focused on the current task without being overwhelmed by
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 goals.
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,
people
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 who concentrate on the present tend to experience less stress and anxiety compared to those who constantly worry about the
future
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.
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, a possible drawback is that they may miss out on long-term opportunities that are better recognized by those who
plan
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 ahead.
On the other hand
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,
individuals
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 who
plan
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 for the
future
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 are often better prepared to face life's difficulties. With a clear
plan
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 in place, they are more likely to take proactive steps towards achieving their goals.
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, hospitals often prefer graduates who have spent years improving their CVs over those who have made no effort to stand out. Despite the advantage of
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 planning ,it can sometimes lead to overthinking, hesitation, and stress, which may prevent
individuals
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 from taking action
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, with a prepared
plan
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, it is important for
individuals
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 to be present and face challenges as they move ahead to achieve their dreams. In conclusion,
although
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 some
people
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 believe that planning for the
future
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 causes unnecessary stress and should be avoided, I disagree. I believe that both living in the present and preparing for the
future
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 are crucial. Together, they increase the chances of achieving one's goals.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to give clearer examples and explain them more to show your points better.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to connect your ideas more smoothly. Use linking words to guide the reader through your thoughts.
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Include a strong personal example that relates more directly to your main argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion that outline your position.
Task Achievement
You present a balanced view by acknowledging both sides of the argument.
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