Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future society while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both of view and give your opinion.

While
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globalisation comes alongside rapid advancement in technology, robotics and AI have
also
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become a growing trend
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wide working areas, especially among young people.
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topic leads to a
debateable
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question : did
robots
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potentially come with
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impacts
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or positive effects
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society?
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, some
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that
robots
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have
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positive
aspects higher than negative aspects for humanity. In
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paragraphs, I will explain both of negative and positive aspects of
robots
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. In
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terms of disadvantages, the involvement of
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robotics
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in daily life among
students
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siginificantly
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significantly
impacts
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and disrupts their creative thinking and critical thinking
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when they do not know anything, they
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will not face
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problems
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keep using
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AI to resolve their
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homework
or issues.
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, it leads to numerous
impacts
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to
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students
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such
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as
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a lack
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of education, ambition or concentration.
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, when I
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around in a university
libarary
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library
, I
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almost
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students
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all students
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still using AI to generate
ideas
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for their projects
instead
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of group discussion or brainstorming. In the
long-term
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education, AI will ruin
students
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'
ideas
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and creativity, and
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, products
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created by
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will be the same
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everyone
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not create
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their own
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original
ideas
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, many newspapers report that
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of AI generation becomes
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an environmental
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issues
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because
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large amounts of energy are costed
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one time
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AI generation.
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, the rise of AI or robotics
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comes
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alongside easier working of idea generation in every working
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.
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, AI will be more and more clever than nowadays. The improvement of AI enhance dramatically some technological and scientific
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research
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because AI in super
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can
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results
million
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faster than physical processing in the lab by
human
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humans
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.
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, AI potentially play an important role in many areas, leading to high development of humanity reality. In
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conclusion, I strongly agree with
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robots
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robot
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uses. Because there are many negative
impacts
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from using them,
while
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they can provide huge numbers of
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, quick predictions and analysis in few minutes for us.
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,
those technology
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can enhance
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for
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community
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the community
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in short-term
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and long-term plans.

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Task Achievement
Your introduction mentions both sides but could be clearer. Try to state your opinion more directly at the end of the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your paragraphs better. Ensure clear topic statements for each paragraph. This helps readers follow your ideas easily.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use simpler and more precise language. Phrases like 'the involvement of robotic' might be clearer as 'the use of robots'.
Task Achievement
Make sure to give clear examples for your points. For instance, you mention students' reliance on AI—explain how this affects their future jobs or creativity further.
Task Achievement
You present a balanced view by discussing both the positive and negative effects of robots before sharing your opinion.
Task Achievement
You make good points about education and creativity, which are relevant in the context of the debate about robots.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • robots
  • society
  • important
  • role
  • negative
  • effects
  • tasks
  • easier
  • clean
  • homes
  • cook
  • meals
  • care
  • elderly
  • quality
  • life
  • jobs
  • fields
  • design
  • software
  • development
  • maintenance
  • technology
  • advances
  • unemployment
  • economic
  • problems
  • privacy
  • security
  • common
  • data
  • risks
  • information
  • well-being
  • medical
  • fields
  • surgeries
  • patient
  • care
  • lives
  • health
  • outcomes
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