In the furure, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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people think that no one will purchase printed newspapers or
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as they can get them for free online
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of paying for them, in my opinion completely i agree with that statement and I believe no more people buy hard copies for two reasons.
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with, I believe that buying
books
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and
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online is more convenient for the lifestyle that we live
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regardless if we get them for free or not , in fact,
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online
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newspaper
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and
books
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are easy to reach and get information quickly ,
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getting online copy not always interesting to the reader if not was hard copy anyhow its easy to carry on your device
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, you can getting any news from different places around the world in
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of a button on your device or download thousands of
books
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and take less space
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then
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real
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one ,
therefore
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getting
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newspaper
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and
books
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online is more convenient .
in addition
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, I believe that getting an online
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or
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books
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is easy to share and see at any time ,
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,
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it
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means more readers and people getting information , even if there are some adults who don't know how to get it online but it's still the best way to read it online
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, you can buy a book that
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available in the local library or read
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newspaper
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that presents different news
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then
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your country . in conclusion , I believe getting online
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or
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is easy to reach and share very fast .

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Task Achievement
Your introduction presents the main idea, but you should have a clearer thesis statement outlining your two reasons. Use clear sentences to guide the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your paragraphs need better topic sentences and clearer connections between ideas. Use linking words like 'firstly' and 'furthermore' to help flow.
Task Achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to support your main points. This will make your argument stronger and clearer for the reader.
Task Achievement
You show a clear opinion about the topic and provide some valid reasons to support it. This is a good start!

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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