The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrate the changes that have occurred to Grange
Park
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today from 1920 when it first opened.
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, there were several features that have been moved, but the main change is the development of the amphitheatre, water feature, children’s play
area
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and the removal of the fountain. To make more accessibility, the two original entrances located on Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street are still kept with an addition of another entrance from the underground car
park
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through Eldon Street. The seats which were
initially
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set around the edges of the
park
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have been concentrated
to
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the central
park
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feature encircling a rose garden after the demolishment of the fountain in that
area
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.
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, the two other rose gardens which were located next to Arnold Avenue’s entrance and at the north-west of the
park
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have been demolished. A huge development
on
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in
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the entertainment
area
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has
been
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taken place, in which the stage for musicians has been upgraded to an enormous amphitheatre for concerts. Having been converted into a children’s play
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and a cafe, the pond for water plants is now gone. A water feature has now been added to the south-east of the
park
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replacing the glasshouse.

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task achievement
Expand the introduction to briefly mention the main features that have changed.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to improve the flow between sentences and make comparisons clearer.
task achievement
Include more specific examples about the changes to support your comparisons.
content
The essay clearly outlines the main changes to the park.
structure
The information is presented in a logical order, starting from the original state to the current state.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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