Too much attention is given to headline-grabbing disaster like earthquakes and floods. Governments should concentrate their resources on educating people about their risks they face nearer to home, which can cost far more lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this.

There is no denying the fact that people recently are facing more
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disasters than before.
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While governments
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should focus on increasing
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society's knowledge about the risks
clouser
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closer
to their houses and I
am fully agree
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with
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viewpoint.
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with, climate change
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contributed to significant
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conditions
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.
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, nations should deal with
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conditions
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as emergency
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. Another point to consider,
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the
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society in schools and shopping
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with educational materials about risky
weather
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situations will definitely minimize the number of deaths.
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, governments could build safe houses near
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each city, which will be
resistance
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to floods and earthquakes and educate people
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on how
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to get
in
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it in
such
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conditions
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.
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, the infrastructure of our cities must be well prepared in order to avoid bad
weather
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conditions
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.
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, Japan had set new regulations in building
premissions
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permissions
and added earthquake resistance tests. In conclusion, humanity is
on
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in
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a
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great danger all over the world and people must be aware of
this
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critical issue and
learned
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learn
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how to
safe
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their lives.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • headline-grabbing
  • disasters
  • earthquakes
  • floods
  • government resources
  • educating people
  • risks
  • cost lives
  • closer to home
  • prevent
  • mitigate
  • damage
  • loss of life
  • responsibility
  • prioritize
  • safety
  • well-being
  • citizens
  • disaster preparedness
  • national curriculum
  • balancing resources
  • preparedness
  • response
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