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Band 2.5

Too much attention is given to headline-grabbing disaster like earthquakes and floods. Governments should concentrate their resources on educating people about their risks they face nearer to home, which can cost far more lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this.

There is no denying the fact that people recently are facing more
weather
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 disasters than before.
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While governments
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Governments
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 should focus on increasing
the
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apply
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society's knowledge about the risks
clouser
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closer
 to their houses and I
am fully agree
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fully agree
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 with
this
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 viewpoint.
To begin
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 with, climate change
had
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has
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 contributed to significant
weather
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conditions
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.
In other words
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, nations should deal with
such
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conditions
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 as emergency
crisis
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crises
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. Another point to consider,
provide
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the
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apply
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society in schools and shopping
centers
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centres
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 with educational materials about risky
weather
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 situations will definitely minimize the number of deaths.
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, governments could build safe houses near
to
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apply
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each city, which will be
resistance
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resistant
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 to floods and earthquakes and educate people
how
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on how
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 to get
in
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into
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 it in
such
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conditions
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.
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, the infrastructure of our cities must be well prepared in order to avoid bad
weather
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conditions
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.
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, Japan had set new regulations in building
premissions
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permissions
 and added earthquake resistance tests. In conclusion, humanity is
on
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in
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a
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apply
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great danger all over the world and people must be aware of
this
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 critical issue and
learned
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learn
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 how to
safe
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save
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 their lives.

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task achievement
Your essay addresses an important topic and presents a clear opinion.
coherence
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • headline-grabbing
  • disasters
  • earthquakes
  • floods
  • government resources
  • educating people
  • risks
  • cost lives
  • closer to home
  • prevent
  • mitigate
  • damage
  • loss of life
  • responsibility
  • prioritize
  • safety
  • well-being
  • citizens
  • disaster preparedness
  • national curriculum
  • balancing resources
  • preparedness
  • response
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