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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates in 2002 how consumers from five nations, namely Italy,
Ireland
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,
Spain
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, Sweden and
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turkey
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Turkey
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, spent their money on three categories of items, like Food,
beverage
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beverages
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 and Smoking for the
first
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 category,
clothers
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clothes
 and shoes for the second one and
finally
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 tuition and leisure for the third.
Overall
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 in every
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nation
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nations
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nations,
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 the
first
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 category was the most important
whereas
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 the third was the least. In the
picture
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picture,
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 it is evident that citizens in
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turkey
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Turkey
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 were the most expensive for the
first
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 group, with a
peercentage
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percentage
 nearly of 32%, followed by
Ireland
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with
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at
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 28.91% , Italy
16.36
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at 16.36
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% ,
Spain
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18.8
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at 18.8
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% and
Swden
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Sweden
with
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at
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 15.77%. For
clothing
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the clothing
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 category the rank was different; Italy was located
as
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apply
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first
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 with a percentage of 9%, after that it is possible to notice that
Ireland
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,
Spain
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 and
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turkey
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Turkey
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 were in the same second position with a value almost of 6.5%,
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finally
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finally,
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 Sweden was in the third place with a 5.4%. For education and free time,
people
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the people
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 of
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turkey
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Turkey
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 spent 4.35%, Sweden and Italy an equivalent percentage of about 3.2%,
Ireland
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 2.21% and
Spain
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 few less
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then
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than
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 2%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ireland, spain, turkey, first with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • food
  • drinks
  • tobacco
  • clothing
  • footwear
  • household goods
  • services
  • leisure
  • education
  • other products
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • followed by
  • in all countries
  • various
  • summarise
  • main features
  • relevant
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • spending
  • table
  • goods
  • data
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