Due to many human activities animal's and plants' life is in danger. Some think that this cannot be changed. Some think that government should do something. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that
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life
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huge risk as
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results
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bad
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behaviors.
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it is a commonly held belief that the change cannot be fixed,
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some individuals
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it. In
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essay, I will discuss both
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of view and give my opinion. On one hand,
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of the nation believes that the change has already
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and they are living
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its consequences.
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, some rare species of
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animals are in danger of extinction.
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, special kinds of tall trees were cut in the Amazone forest years ago.
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, pouring oil waste products
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the rivers
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resulted in water pollution and local
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use
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water as it
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contains
toxins.
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,
people
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think that
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authorities
should set regulations and rules when dealing with
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nature in order to avoid
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harmful activities.
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,
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must increase
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society's knowledge about the significant natural changes
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occurring
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our planet.
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, educate the students in schools about deforestation. In conclusion, despite
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having different views, I tend to believe that it is the
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and
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society
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responibility
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responsibility
to take care of our planet and minimize the changes that could
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affect
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the
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natural life.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
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Use linking words to connect your ideas better.
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Ensure that your examples are specific and detailed.
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Check for spelling mistakes and grammar errors.
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You have a good attempt at discussing both sides of the argument.
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Your ideas are relevant to the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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