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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
percentage
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 of
films
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 that
has
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have
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 been released and the total
percentage
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 of
the
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apply
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ticket
sales
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around
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between
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 1996 and 2006 in a country.
Overall
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The
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drama
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films
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has
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 the highest
percentage
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 in both years 1996 and 2006 , And comedy is the second highest
percentage
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 of
films
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 that
has
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 been released in the year 1996 to the year 2006 , And for fantasy and romance both
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have
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small
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a small
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percentage
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percentages
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 in both release and
sales
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 but they are worth mentioning
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, More
release
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releases
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 doesn't always mean more
sales
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 , And the graphs really prove that by seeing comedy is less
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then
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than
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drama
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the drama
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 in releases but still
manage
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manages
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 to get higher
sales
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 ,
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However
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drama
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 still
get
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gets
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 high
sales
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although
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its
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it's
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 not as much as
comedy
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a comedy
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 but still get over 15% and its worth mentioning that
drama
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 has very stable
sales
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 between 1996 and 2006 it
didnt
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didn't
 change that much unlike Fantasy
films
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 and Romance

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, films, sales, drama with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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