Some people believe that traveling with in a city is better by a car while other think bicycle is better means. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

There's a discussion going on, About how some people
thinks
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travelling
with
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apply
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in a city is better by
a
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apply
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car
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,
While
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others think that travelling
with
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by
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a
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apply
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bicycle
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is a lot
more
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apply
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better. I will be discussing both of them and
i
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I
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will be giving my opinion. For the people who think travelling by
car
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is better , They have a good argument to discuss here and
that is
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because
traveling
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travelling
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by
car
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is
non arguable
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a lot safer and much more comfortable and you can pick up passengers if you have to ,
On the other hand
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,
traveling
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travelling
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by
bicycle
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can be a life-changing for you
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when
whan
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when
it comes to improving you're health and
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you're
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stamina and will provide you with non-
forgetable
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forgettable
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moments and stories that you could tell
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, both of them have good points , I can't see travelling by
bicycle
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is
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as
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comparable to travelling with a
car
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, Because of the safety and being able to take short brakes
while
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travelling in the
car
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and the best feature that the
car
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has is
the
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you could have
passenger
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a passenger
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with you
while
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you travel , unlike the
bicycle
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.

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introduction
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examples
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content
You present clear arguments for both sides of the discussion.
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Your essay has a clear opinion, which is essential for this type of essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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