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Transport delays and long journey are widespread phenomenon in many cities today. What are the causes of this problem, and how could the situation be improved?

There is no denying the fact that fast transportation between cities is
crusial
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crucial
 in
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 modern world.
Recenlty
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Recently
, many delays and long journies are
occuring
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occurring
 as daily bases. In
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 essay, I will
dicuss
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discuss
 the factors of
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 issue and the approaches to
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 it.
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 with, there are many reasons for the delays, as the population
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 increased and the demand is significantly raised for
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apply
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flights and trains and there are no alternative transportation methods.
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, bad weather conditions
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 as heavy rain could contribute to
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 phenomenon. Another point to consider, the authorities should consider
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 new railways for trains between countries in order to minimize the high demand
on
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for
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 flights.
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, Saudi Arabia built a new railway between three main cities which helped the community to avoid the long and costly flights.
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, the governments could take proactive steps and analyse the factors affecting
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 problem and take the
experince
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experience
 from the developed nations.
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, transportation companies must set a plan for
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 travel season each year.
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, every year in December, families return back to their home country to spend the vacation. In conclusion, there are many solutions for these
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 situations. The responsibility is on both private companies and the governments.

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Task Achievement
Work on spelling and grammar to improve clarity. Use correct words like 'crucial' instead of 'crusial' and 'recently' instead of 'recenlty'.
Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details. This will help your reader follow your thoughts more easily.
Task Achievement
Try to use a greater variety of examples to clearly explain your points. This can strengthen your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Task Achievement
You identified key issues like population growth and bad weather as causes of transport delays.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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