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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the overview of the
city
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 in Brandfield where
city
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 designers have decided to construct a new shopping mall for
this
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area
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, and two distinct sites have been recommended.
Overall
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,
while
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 the first
site
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 is located near the industrial
area
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, the second one is situated near the residential
area
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.
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, both sites are in close proximity to the
city
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 centre. It can be seen clearly from the map that the first place is located on the borders of the river, the road, and the railway, so its location makes it convenient to visit.
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, situating near the housing estate provides a significant advantage for residents. There is easy access to the recreational
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 where visitors can spend their time playing golf or having a great time in the park. Regarding the second place, it is situated in the south-east of the town. Unlike the first
site
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, it does not have direct access to the completely green
area
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 and the residential place.
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,
this
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site
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 is in close proximity to the industrial estate, and the railway and the road border it.
In addition
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, the
city
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 centre is on the northwest of
this
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site
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, area, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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