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It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is no denying the fact that saving
money
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 is important for young generations because it will provide them with financial stability in the
future
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.
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 it is commonly held to belief that young
people
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 should spend their
money
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 and enjoy without worrying about the
future
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. there is
also
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 an argument that younger individuals should spend less and save more
money
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 so they don't suffer from poverty in the
future
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.
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 essay will analyse
this
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 from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, many
people
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 believe that young
people
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 should learn how to manage
money
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 responsibly.
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, saving
money
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 from a young age will make them develop financial discipline.
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, those who begin saving in their teenage years are more likely to avoid debt and build a stable financial
future
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. 
On the other hand
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, some argue that young
people
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 should spend
money
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, enjoy their teenage years and experience new things
instead
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 of worrying about saving. it is
also
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 possible to say that, many young Men and Women have limited income, making it difficult to save,
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, students may need to spend on tuition and living expenses, making a little room for saving. In conclusion. There are no easy answers to
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 question on balance
however
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, I tend to believe that encouraging young
people
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 to save more
money
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 is essential, as it prepares them for unexpected events and hard circumstances and the value of
long- term
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 planning.

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Try to make your main points clearer. Explain each idea more fully so that the reader can understand them easily.
coherence
Make sure your introduction states your opinion clearly. Use a more direct thesis statement to guide your essay.
coherence
Link your ideas better between paragraphs. Use words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to show the order of your points clearly.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic and provide different viewpoints.
coherence
Your conclusion summarizes your ideas nicely, showing what you believe.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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