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Writing Samples
Band 3

Many people use written language in a less formal and more relaxed way. Why? Does this developm advantages and disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no denying the fact that recently people
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 using written language in
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unformal
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informal
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 way.
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 the community is
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wondering
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 the consequences of
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 phenomenon. I will analyse the causes and disadvantages in
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 issue.
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,
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 of the nation
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 not have the experience and knowledge needed to write formal texts, which leads them to not
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it
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them
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.
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, in
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communication between us become more
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 than sending messages. In terms of disadvantages,
youth
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young
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 college students will not be able
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 long
essay
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 in their educational
life
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.
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, it is difficult for them to understand research papers if they need to conduct
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research.
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, writing emails or letters in a professional way is a significant skill in
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most jobs and learning it from
younger
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 age is much easier than when
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they
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 are older.
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, when applying for a certain job, the employer will
difinitelly
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definitely
 check the candidates' skills. In conclusion, I believe that the authorities should consider adding formal writing
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 in the schools in order to prepare the students for their future life.

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The introduction needs to clearly state your opinion on the topic and outline the main points you will discuss in the essay. Make sure to use proper grammar.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your ideas. Each paragraph should clearly connect to the main argument and lead naturally from one to the next.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and make your ideas clearer.
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You have identified the topic and expressed a clear opinion about the need for formal writing education.
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Your points about the disadvantages of informal writing are relevant and show understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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