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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

People have different views on the use of experimentation on
animals
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. Some think that experimenting on
animals
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 should not be legal and banned,
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 others feel that the
results
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 and knowledge gained from these experiments are invaluable. I believe that
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 animal experiments can yield important
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, it is important to follow a set of strict regulations and ethical reasons when
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. On one hand, many believe that practising on creatures on behalf of humankind is justified as they believe that human
lives
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 are more important than them.
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 philosophical beliefs and investigation, humans are known to have elevated mental capabilities and self-awareness,
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 having higher moral status.
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results
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 in the idea that human
lives
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 are more precious.
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, using
animals
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 can not only bring about major
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 in the scientific area
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 but
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 bring less risk to humans.
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,
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 are often used in experimentation. Having a much shorter lifespan, scientists can see
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the effects
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 of drugs and medication throughout their whole lifespan and gather data much quicker, as compared to using individuals for testing.
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 can help to save many more
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.
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, some hope for alternative methods to gain
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, but when
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 are at stake, and other methods may take a long time to be developed and tested, sacrificing others seems to be the best solution.
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, it is important to follow ethical considerations when using
animals
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. In psychology, the 3Rs - Replacement, Reduction, and Refinement – are key ethical principles guiding exploration involving
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. Researchers must prioritize minimizing harm to testees, considering alternatives, using as
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 test subjects as possible, and refining experimental procedures to minimize suffering.
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, ethical guidelines emphasize respect for
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, their welfare, and the potential benefits of investigation,
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 recognizing the limitations and potential harm of animal experimentation. In conclusion, there are many benefits when using live lab subjects for experiments that can better alleviate humankind.
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,
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 conducting investigations, it is
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 follow regulations that regard the
animals
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' well-being and not treat them as disposal tools.

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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and relates directly to your argument. Sometimes, ideas feel a bit mixed up, which can confuse the reader.
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In the introduction, clearly state your opinion to make it easier for the reader to understand where you stand. This will help set the stage for your argument.
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Use more specific examples to support your points. Examples help strengthen your argument and show your understanding better.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This organization helps guide the reader through your thoughts.
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You present both sides of the argument, showing a balanced view. This adds depth to your essay and demonstrates critical thinking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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