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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job

Hello, Mr. and Mrs. Kapoor. I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to
covey
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convey
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 my interest in a job, you recently posted on
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Indeed
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. In the job description, I noticed that you are looking for
a
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apply
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someone who can teach "Hindi" to your two kids. I believe,
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 work will be completely suitable for me, as Hindi is my mother
tounge
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tongue
 and beyond that, I would say that I love teaching. Apart from that, I am
professional
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 Cook. I can
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 help you to cook food
,
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 when you are busy or want to take a break from the kitchen. I am
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literally
to
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in need of
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 job, because I am completely free for a year, and looking
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 which can provide me
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a
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work for at least a year.
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 is
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one of the
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 why I am
intrested
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interested
to work
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in working
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 for you. Thank you for your attention, I look forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully,
Jemish
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Jewish

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task achievement
Make sure to address the specific needs of the job in your response. For instance, mention how you would create a fun learning environment for the children.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer transitions between your ideas. For example, use words like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', or 'In addition'.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to spelling and grammar. 'litterely' should be 'literally', 'intrested' should be 'interested', and 'cook food' could be 'prepare meals'.
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Your enthusiasm for teaching Hindi is clear, which is a strong point in your letter.
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Including your cooking skills shows that you can contribute to the family in more ways than one.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • TESOL certification
  • Experience in teaching children
  • Knowledge of Australian culture
  • Passion for language education
  • Flexible and adaptable
  • Design customized lesson plans
  • Patient and understanding
  • Strong communication skills
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Participate in family activities
  • Enthusiasm for cultural exchange
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