Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because people can acquire information on the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that

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information is more accessible on the Internet, which has raised

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considerable debate

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the need for

schools

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. Whether it is

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for learning or not. In my opinion, I

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strongly

believe that

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a crucial place for education.

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with, children are learning

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lessons

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the usual teaching

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it is a

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place

where they have the chance to make new friends which

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improves

their social skills.

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, they will be able to know how to communicate with different types of people.

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, not every child

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the same capabilities for self-learning as home studying

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the student to learn by himself without the support from teachers. Another point to consider, the students must be evaluated by exams, assignments or projects and

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be done by the use of

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, the quality of home learning will not be the same as the

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traditional

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evaluation

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, in

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modern world, the majority of the community's

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have outdoor activities

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as football or swimming which improve their health and minimize the risk of obesity.

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up in the early morning and going to school

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a daily basis will create a healthy routine for the kids and prepare them for

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future life.

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, younger individuals will be able to leave their houses for some hours and

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on themselves without

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help from their parents. In conclusion, despite the

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useful

advantages of the Internet, there is a significant need for

schools

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in our lives.

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Jun 7, 2025

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task achievement

Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and use correct grammar.

coherence and cohesion

Improve transitions between ideas and make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea.

general

Check for spelling and punctuation errors to enhance clarity of your writing.

task achievement

You provided good reasons to support your argument about the importance of schools.

task achievement

You included personal insights about the benefits of social skills and routines at schools.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

267 words

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