Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because people can acquire information on the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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information is more accessible on the Internet, which has raised
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considerable debate
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the need for
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for learning or not. In my opinion, I
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a crucial place for education.
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lessons
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the usual teaching
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it is a
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where they have the chance to make new friends which
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, they will be able to know how to communicate with different types of people.
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, not every child
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the same capabilities for self-learning as home studying
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the student to learn by himself without the support from teachers. Another point to consider, the students must be evaluated by exams, assignments or projects and
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be done by the use of
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, the quality of home learning will not be the same as the
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evaluation
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, in
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modern world, the majority of the community's
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have outdoor activities
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as football or swimming which improve their health and minimize the risk of obesity.
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up in the early morning and going to school
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a daily basis will create a healthy routine for the kids and prepare them for
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future life.
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on themselves without
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help from their parents. In conclusion, despite the
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advantages of the Internet, there is a significant need for
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in our lives.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and use correct grammar.
coherence and cohesion
Improve transitions between ideas and make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
general
Check for spelling and punctuation errors to enhance clarity of your writing.
task achievement
You provided good reasons to support your argument about the importance of schools.
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You included personal insights about the benefits of social skills and routines at schools.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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