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Nowadays most parents put a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. What are the reasons for parents to do this? Does it have a positive or a negative effect on children in general?

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 their children and
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 think is to help them to grow and face the
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challenges
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 goes both ways as they have
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positive
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 as nothing come easy and so fast as the
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children
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 if the
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grow
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wealth
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 always get what he
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 from his parents he
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 always like
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don't
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challenges
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believe
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belive
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believe
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negative
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 should not continue after a
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responsible
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responsible
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 his choices ,
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parents
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parnts
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parents interfere
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interfere
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career
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 or his
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relation
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relationship
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negative
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child
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child
 and not learn
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 about
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experience
experiences
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putting
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presure
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pressure
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child
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 can be useful
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sometimes
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 to help them grow , but not forever which effect the
child
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 of making desigon and
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 think there is
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postive
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positive
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 putting pressure .

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Make sure to use more clear sentences that connect ideas. Each paragraph should focus on one clear point.
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Try to explain your ideas more fully and clearly. Give more examples to support your points.
language quality
Carefully check your spelling and grammar. Avoid small mistakes that can change the meaning of your sentences.
content
You have identified both positive and negative sides of the issue which shows a balanced approach.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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