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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language isin order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that theseare not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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, the debate about what is the reason for learning an additional
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side
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, citizens think that the main reason for learning a linguistic skill is
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 it when taking a trip or working
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abroad
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.
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 other
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disagree
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 on
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 hand, those who support the view
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 the only
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at
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 learning one more
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international
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 is to communicate in other
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, basically when
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travel or
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 a job in other
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. it is elemental to know how to talk with
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 by using their natural words to deal with all the things smoothly.
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 communication becomes easier if both sides have a common expression.Lack of
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 skills in
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countries
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 might prevent us from enjoying the place fully.
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, proponents of
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 person try to learn
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 have other reasons.
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 as,
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 a new
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 could be a beneficial tool
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other
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about other
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countries
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countries'
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 cultures.
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even if
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 stay domestically, they
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 read other
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countries
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articles easily.
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controlling a foreign
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 many benefits not only for communicating in abroad.
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, knowing a new
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 opens many doors , particularly for students, to study abroad.
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 is because many foreign Universities, these days, demand the prospective candidate to at least have a basic understanding of their official
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. In conclusion, both
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 presents valid arguments.
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 I believe that
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try
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 to study a new
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is
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not only for
traveling
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 or working abroad. the second
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 offers a more sustainable
appoint
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 that there are
more
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other reasons that prompt
people
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 to choose to learn a foreign
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task achievement
Your introduction needs to clearly state your opinion. Make sure to summarize the main points of discussion in a straightforward way.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your paragraphs better. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and the ideas should flow smoothly from one to the next.
task achievement
Make sure to support your arguments with clear examples. Using more specific examples will help make your points stronger.
task achievement
You do a good job of recognizing both sides of the argument.
task achievement
You provided some reasons why learning a language is beneficial beyond just travel or work.
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