Some pepole think that best way to solve the problem of air pollution in cities is to increase the cost of vehicle fuel. Others think that different measures should be taken.

In recent years,
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the rapid increase of
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in the
cities
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, it emits more carbon
emission
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which is very
harmfull
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harmful
for
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to
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the
enviroment
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environment
.
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, some experts
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that
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the best
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way to solve the issue is to increase the cost of
fuel
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.
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others think that expert should come up with the different
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approach
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essay will examine
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both
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views and give
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better expert opinion
which
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on which
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is good for the
enviroment
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environment
. on the one hand, Experts suggest that increasing the cost of vehicle
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fuel
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can
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to less driving as
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pepole
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people
will try to save money and find
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alternative transport methods.
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could reduce the
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cars
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number of cars
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on the roads and lower
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air
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pollution
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.
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Furthermore
,
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higher
fuel
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prices can encourage the use of public transport,cycling or walking which are more
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environmentally
friendly
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.
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can
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promote
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healthier
lifestyles as
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people
become more active. For
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,
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Singapore
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the Singapore
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Government
increase
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the taxes on
cars
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and vehicle
fuel
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to encourage
thier
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their
citizens
use
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more public transportation. As a
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, 80% of people in
Singapore
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use public transport for their daily commute.
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fact,
Singapore
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is one of the
pollution
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free
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countries in the world.
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, Some experts
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argue
that there are better solutions than just increasing the
fuel
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prices. For
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, The Government should conduct
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an
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awarness
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awareness
program about
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air
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pollution
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and its
affects
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on the
cities
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, Authorities should encourage
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pepole
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people
to buy Electric
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which are more
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eco-friendly
.
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of
cars
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which are producing more harmful
emmission
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emission
emissions
to the environment.
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to that,
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government
should incentives
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pepole
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people
who
are planting
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more
tree
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trees
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and
creating
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create
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more green spaces in
cities
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. For
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,
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Singapore
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the Singapore
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government
they themselves promoting vertical farming in
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large builds.
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, trees can absorb the polluted
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and improve the
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quailty
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quality
. In
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, I prefer
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view is
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sustaniable
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sustainable
option for the
cities
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to
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slove
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solve
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the problem of
air
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pollution
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and
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, As the
cizitens
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citizens
of the world it is everyone's
responsiblites
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responsibility
responsibilities
to keep our earth
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pollution free
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for the
genration
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generation
and encourage everyone to plant at least a single tree in
thier
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their
lifetime.

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task achievement
Your introduction is somewhat clear but needs to be more precise. Make sure to outline the specific points you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
There are grammatical and spelling errors that make some sentences hard to understand. Proofread your work to catch these mistakes.
coherence and cohesion
In the body paragraphs, make sure each point is linked clearly back to the main topic. Use transition words to improve flow.
task achievement
Expand on your ideas a little more. Some points are mentioned, but not fully explained or supported with strong examples.
task achievement
You provide examples that relate to the topic, which is very good for supporting your points.
coherence and cohesion
You introduce both sides of the argument, showing you understand the topic well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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