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It was predicted that people living in the twenty-first century would have more free time than ever before because of improvements in technology. To what extent has this prediction come true?

Living in the twenty-first century, the era of modern technology and advancements made
life
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 much easier and saved
people
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 plenty of
time
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. In my view, I agree that being surrounded by technology enables individuals to have much free
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 that can be well spent
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 other developments and
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 enhancement of human
life
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. In the old days, house chores
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 would take several hours of the day to accomplish as everything should be done by hand
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 as sweeping, dishwashing and laundry. Nowadays, the presence of machines (
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 as
dishwasher
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,
vacuum
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and vacuum
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microwave
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 among others) that are easy to operate and can finish the work with optimal results that are compared to or even better than human work
spare
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people
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 a lot of
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 that they can spend in achieving their
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 goals.
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, a new leap in technology in the current century is the smart home. If you are a busy person, it would make your
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 easier to have everything you need at home at a press of a button or by giving orders by voice.
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, assistance devices like Alexa can answer questions which saves
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time
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of
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searching,
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 to emails and
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 messages, all
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 you are taking your lunch or doing your daily exercise. In conclusion, the
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 saved by using these technologies is invaluable and
people
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 should learn how to utilize
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 valuable
time
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 for things that can not be achieved by machines or technologies like visiting friends and family or improving and maintaining mental and physical health.

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Expand on the examples to give more details on how technology saves time in specific daily tasks.
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Use transitions to better connect your ideas, making it easier for the reader to follow your arguments.
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Consider adding a counter-argument to show a deeper understanding of the topic.
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Ensure your conclusion summarizes the main points more clearly for a stronger final statement.
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You clearly express your opinion on technology saving time.
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Your introduction sets the context and states your position well.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • efficiency
  • leisure
  • automation
  • blurred boundaries
  • always-on culture
  • advancements
  • smart appliances
  • chores
  • responsibilities
  • leisure activities
  • social media
  • video games
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