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The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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bar chart illustrates the proportion of some transport hobbies of young
people
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 in different countries in one year.
Overall
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, it can be observed that most of the young
people
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 in the UK and Italy use a car to commute
whereas
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 the youth in the United States
also
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 use
cars
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 mostly and young
people
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 in France are interested in using
bicycles
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 more than any other vehicle.
In addition
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,
cars
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 in Italy had the highest proportion
as well as
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motorcycles
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 in
this
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 country were less mostly attractive. Beginning with the transport hobbies of young
people
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 in the UK and Italy. With respect to the UK, the figure for
cars
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 was double that for
bicycles
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, at 60% and 30% of
people
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, respectively,
while
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motorcycles
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 accounted for a small portion at 10%.
Likewise
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, regarding Italy, the data for
cars
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 at over 70% of
people
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 outnumbered the figures for
motorcycles
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 and
bicycles
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 at around 10% during the timeframe. Moving onto the remaining countries in
this
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 bar chart. In connection with the United States, the figure for
cars
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 was doubled that for
motorcycles
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, at 60% and 30%, respectively,
whereas
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 the data for
bicycles
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 stood at about 10% of
people
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.
Similarly
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, for France, the data for
bicycles
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 was modestly higher than for
cars
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, at around 45% and 40% of
people
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, respectively and the figure for
motorcycles
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 just accounted for over 10% of
people
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 throughout the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cars, bicycles, motorcycles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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