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Band 2.5

Some people think that international new s is more important than local news. Others argue that local news is more important. Discus both views and give your opinion.

Often argued that international
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 is more important than local
news
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discuss
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 both views,
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with
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 I believe
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that
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internatoinal
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international
 actions
has
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 the
bigest
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 impact on the
world
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genral
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general
. First of all, we are living in the same
world
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 so if there
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somting
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something
dangurs
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dangers
happining
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happening
 in a
littel
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little
 town could affect on people's
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health
, the
news
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 the TV even the reports should talk about it to let the
world
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 know that " there is
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something
unhealty
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unhealthy
 going on and everyone should be careful"
becouse
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because
 even if it's all started from a small
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village
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the
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problem can
increases
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 more and more to
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become
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come
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 an
umeguncy
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emergency
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situation
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world
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 and people would not be a were of it if no one speaks about it.
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,
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local
news
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is not important as
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as
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international one, I could say it has an impact on our daily lives
for example
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 it could be talking about an event, school, or new
experment
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experiment
 around, so it is about a small community and not every
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 matter. To wrap up, the problems that
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happening
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world
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general
 could be easily affect
on
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a lot of
cuntrys
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countries
.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclude with your opinion as well.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer sentences and more logical structure in your paragraphs. This will help your reader follow your ideas better.
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Use specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention a specific international news event and a local news story to show the differences.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion that international news is more important, which is a good start.
coherence and cohesion
You have attempted to discuss both views, showing an understanding of the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news
  • important
  • local
  • international
  • community
  • events
  • safety
  • world
  • understand
  • life
  • connect
  • affect
  • issues
  • awareness
  • daily
  • people
  • help
  • global
  • school
  • attention
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