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9 June 2025, The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

9 June 2025, The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The bar graph depicts the average number of
hours
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 each day in Greece in August 2019 by
visitors
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 from four different countries.
Overall
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,
Chinese
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tourists
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 spent most of their time reading books, as did American
tourists
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,
whereas
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Turkish
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 and Brazilian
tourists
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 organized their longest
hours
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 on the beach. Meanwhile, visiting places was the shortest average of
hours
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 for all
visitors
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 among all leisure activities. Brazilians spent an average of 6
hours
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 per day on the beaches of Greece compared to 5, 4, and 3
hours
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 for
Turkish
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, American, and
Chinese
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visitors
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, respectively. For
Chinese
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tourists
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, reading was the activity they spent the most time on, averaging 8
hours
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 per day.
By comparison
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, reading books became the second most time-consuming for three other nationalities, with Americans reading for 5
hours
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, which was 1 hour longer than
Turkish
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 and Brazilian
visitors
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.
On the other hand
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, all four tourist groups visiting places in Greece spent the shortest time on three activities. In detail, an equal average of 6
hours
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 was spent by American and
Turkish
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visitors
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, followed by Brazilian
tourists
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 at 2
hours
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,
while
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Chinese
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tourists
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 spent just 1 hour.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, visitors, chinese, tourists, turkish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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