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Band 4

the plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

The map depicts the southwest airport now and how it will change after its renovation
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next year.
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, new facilities and options will be added including an ATM, a bag drop, a car hire, a shop and a sky train. The
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 will increase and departures and
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 will remain in their original locations.
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, a check-in and a café were located
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 either side of the departures. Next to, the passport control was located and
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 the security. After security, the walkway was surrounded by 8
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, engulfing it.
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 the next floor,
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passport control and customs were located respectively before the
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 which was sited across them. After reconstruction, in departures and
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, a new door will be built next to the old one. The check-in will be relocated to a new place and a new bag drop will replace it. The café will be moved to
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 side of the departure and new shops will be added next to the security. The
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 will turn into two branched corridors with 18
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, engulfing a sky train which will replace the old walkway. In the
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, a new café, an ATM and a car park will be built.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly summarize the main changes to the airport in one clear statement.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using linking words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to help with the flow of ideas.
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Be careful with grammar. Check your sentences for correct structure and tense throughout the essay.
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You provided a good overview of the current and future airport layout.
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The detail about new facilities adds value to your answer.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • terminal
  • car park
  • runways
  • redevelopment
  • proposed changes
  • expanded terminals
  • new gates
  • additional parking
  • amenities
  • navigation
  • environmental impact
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • traffic congestion
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