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Some people believe global trade is the best way for an economy to grow. However, others believe we should only produce and buy products made in our own country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The debate surrounding global
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 and domestic
production
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's impact on economic
growth
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 remains contentious.
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 some argue that global
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 is crucial for prosperity, others advocate for a focus on local
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.
This
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 essay will explore both viewpoints and provide my own perspective. Proponents of global
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 emphasize its ability to leverage comparative advantage, enhancing
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 efficiency and resource allocation. It offers access to international markets, promoting export-led
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 and encouraging innovation.
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, it provides consumers with a wide range of competitively priced goods and services.
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, components for mobile phones are sourced from numerous countries,
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 as the Congo and Taiwan and are assembled in China.
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 has proven an efficient manufacturing model, and cost savings are often passed on to the consumer. Supporters of domestic
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 argue that it promotes national self-sufficiency, protects local industries, and generates employment opportunities. By prioritizing local products, countries can ensure quality control and adherence to regulations
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 fostering cultural preservation and community support.
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 is especially the
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 nations which rely heavily on agriculture and need to
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 develop their economy,
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 as Brazil. If farmers are paid fair prices for their agricultural
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 as opposed to losing out
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 cheaper imports, development will be more stable. In my opinion, global
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 contributes significantly to economic
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. It allows countries to tap into international markets, boost exports, and access diverse goods and services.
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, supporting domestic
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 is equally important for self-reliance, protecting local industries, and ensuring socio-economic stability.
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, balancing both global
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 and domestic
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 is essential for optimal economic
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Make sure to clearly state your opinion at the end of the introduction to guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Use more connecting words and phrases to improve flow between sentences and ideas.
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Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments, especially for local production.
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You presented both sides of the argument well, showing understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs are generally well-organized, making it easy to follow your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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