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47.The table below shows the worldwide market share of notebook computer manufacturers in the year 2006, 2007 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

47.The table below shows the worldwide market share of notebook computer manufacturers in the year 2006, 2007 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given table illustrates the worldwide
market
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 share of 8 different notebook computer manufacturers, consisting of
HP
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, Dell, Acer, Toshiba, Lenovo,
Fujitsu-Siemens
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, and others in the years 2006 and 2007.
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, it can be seen that
HP
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 had the highest
market
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 share in 2006 and 2007,
while
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Fujitsu-Siemens
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 ranked the lowest in both years. For a company
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 as
HP
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, both figures in the years 2006 and 2007 display the highest
market
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 share, representing 31.4% in 2006 and 34% in 2007.
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, Dell is the 2nd follow-up with 16.6% in 2006 increased to 20.2% in 2007.
Fujitsu-Siemens
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,
on the other hand
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, has ranked the lowest with only 4.8% in 2006, which dipped to 2.4% in the upcoming year. Despite the rise in the
market
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 contribution of
HP
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, Dell, and Toshiba in 2007, the other companies faced a fall in the
market
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 proportion.
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 includes
:
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 Acer, Lenovo,
Fujitsu-Siemens
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 and other small companies.
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 drop is between 0.9% to 3.5%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words market, hp, fujitsu-siemens with synonyms.
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