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The table below gives information about the underground railway system in six cities. Summarize where relevant

The table below gives information about the underground railway system in six cities. Summarize where relevant
The given table illustrates the underground railway systems that were counted in six cities. The information includes the date opened, the length of the road, and the
passengers
Correct quantifier usage
number of passengers
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 per year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that London had the longest routes of the railroad and opened for the first time,
whereas
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 Kyoto had the shortest rail and Los Angeles started the latest. In terms of customers per year, Tokyo had the highest amount with 1927 million, followed by Paris with 1191 million, making it the second-largest passenger, and Kyoto showed lower figures among others. For the length of the route, London has the longest value around 397 km, considerably more than other cities,
while
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 the shortest group are from Los Angeles at 28 km and Kyoto at only 11 km. For underground opening time, London operated the railroad in 1863, followed by Paris after 37 years. In 1927, Tokyo came into the business
as well as
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 Los Angeles opened the underground railway network in 2001.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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