The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced
the flowchart illustrates the production of the product related to
milk
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and packaging for commercial sale.
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, The process can be divided into seven steps starting with cows grazing , the final step is reaching
to
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customers
Firstly
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, cows are grazing
on
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in
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Greenland to produce
milk
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the next step is
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automatic
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automatically
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milked
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milking
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by a milking machine two times a day ,
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then
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and then
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the fresh
milk
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is fridged in refrigeration storage to maintain the fresh
milk
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.
After
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this
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step , the truck delivers fresh
milk
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to the dairy and goes on to the next steps .The process of collecting, producing ,storing , and transporting
to
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dairy
are
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is
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repeated daily.In the dairy factory, fresh
milk
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will go through many processes in different storages which are produced commodities like
,
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cheese, cream and butter.
In addition
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, the proportion of
milk
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is pasteurized at high temperature and
then
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packaged into a bottle of
milk
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which is going to be sold in supermarkets and shops, in order to reach people
buy
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who buy
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the product.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • milking machines
  • containers
  • refrigerated trucks
  • pasteurization
  • homogenization
  • separation
  • standardization
  • cream
  • skim milk
  • fat content
  • packaging
  • cartons
  • bottles
  • dairy processing plant
  • quality control
  • safety and quality standards
  • distribution
  • retailers
  • grocery stores
  • vendors
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