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Some people say that it is beneficial for young people to visit different countries of the world, others oppose. Do you agree or disagree? Provide reasons and support them with your own examples.

There is no denying the fact that travelling is important for various ages.
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 it is a commonly held belief that a lot of benefits boys and girls gain from going to many countries, there is
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 an argument opposing it . In my opinion, I consider that exploring the world is crucial for them.
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 with, visiting other countries will increase their experiences
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, it has been shown that people who travel and visit different cities develop their brains and have more social relations and learn more than 2 languages
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, if an individual explores other cultures and deals with a lot that will lead him to a strong personality. Another point to consider,
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 young people face issues
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 is why some parents oppose the idea of
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 another country It is
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 possible to say that there are young and they have time when they grow to visit what they want ,
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, others argue that it is not necessary,
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, may
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 face any financial or health problems out there. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that every individual must visit other countries at least once in his life

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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supports it with examples.
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Try to provide more specific examples to make your points stronger.
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Check your grammar and punctuation to improve clarity.
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You clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
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Your conclusion summarizes your viewpoint well.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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