Given below, is a line graph showing closing average prices of precious metals in year 2013 to 2021

The line graph illustrates the average closing prices of
gold
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,
platinum
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, and palladium from 2013 to 2021, measured in dollars per ounce.
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, palladium saw a dramatic increase over the period, surpassing both
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and
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,
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platinum
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declined
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.
Gold
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remained relatively stable but showed a modest rise in later years. In 2013, both
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and
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were priced
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$1,500 per ounce,
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palladium was significantly lower, at roughly $700.
Platinum
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steadily lost value, reaching a low of just over $800 by 2018.
Gold
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dipped to about $1,100 in 2015 but remained relatively stable until 2018. Palladium’s price remained flat until 2016, after which it began a sharp ascent. By 2018, it had overtaken
platinum
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, and a year later, it surpassed
gold
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. It peaked at nearly $2,400 in 2020, making it the most valuable of the three.
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also
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rose steadily after 2018, reaching approximately $1,800 in 2020 and staying level
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.
Platinum
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showed
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recovery in the final years but remained the least valuable metal.

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Ensure smooth transitions between points to improve flow.
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You provided a good overview of the trends in prices over time.
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The introduction clearly states what the graph is about.

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